Friday, January 9, 2015

Eli, Where Are You?

This is day five of the 20 Days of Chill writing challenge hosted by P. J. at A ‘lil HooHaa. Please join me as we share a month of reading, writing and discovery. Today's topic is Invisible.  This is a continuation of my series following the life of Eli.

Eli and his friend Paul were knocking back a few beers and playing pool at the Come As You Are Saloon when in walks this stranger.  Now strangers aren't an unusual sight at the CAYAS, but this one was different. He had a ominous air about him and a crescent scar across his left cheek. His eyes were dark, almost daring someone to mess with him.

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Eli and Paul watched as he worked his way to the bar. "Bartender, I'd like a pomegranate martini." 

When they heard that, Paul burst out laughing.  "A pomegranate martini?  What kind of a drink is that for a man?"  

"Shut up, Paul" urged Eli. "What kind of idiot are you, anyway?"

The stranger turned and stared at Paul.  It was a dark stare.  An evil stare. He started walking toward them, glass in hand. He stops mere inches from Paul, tosses back the martini and slams the glass on the table, sending shards of glass flying.

In a low voice that belied the intensity of the moment he remarked almost casually, "That wasn't very nice." 

By this time Eli wasn't feeling very confident about the outcome, and wishing he could suddenly become invisible. 

"My friend didn't mean anything" Eli interjected, hoping to defuse the situation. "Sometimes he can be a bit crass, but he's totally harmless. By the way, my name is Eli, what's yours?" Being friendly couldn't hurt he thought.

"Name's Rico" growled the stranger, and I don't take kindly to being laughed at," gripping the stem of the broken glass. "I ordered this for my old lady."

Paul never knew when to leave well enough alone and asked, "Then why did you drink it?"

Again that dark, evil stare.  "So I could do this" as he raised his arm. "Nobody laughs at me in front of my woman!"

At that point, Eli again wished he were invisible.  As Paul was about to feel the wrath of Rico, he called out "Eli, where are you?"

"What's the matter with you, I'm right here, but not for long. Run!" shouted Eli.

Both men turned and stared. They'd heard Eli shout, but there was no one there, and Paul asked again, "Where did you go?"

Eli reached out his hand to wave, "over here", and it was his turn to freak out. He couldn't see his hand.  He looked down, he had no legs. He looked in the mirror.  No reflection. "What the...?"

Eli, he said to himself, stay calm and don't say anything...just leave.  Gotta try and figure this out.

What do you think happened to Eli?

If you want to catch up on Eli's adventures:

The Princess
Eli and the Redhead 
The Winged Woman

Meet Eli's Mother

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  1. Well that's an interesting ending to this part of the story...

    1. Eli definitely leads an interesting life. He and Paul are always getting into trouble.

  2. I may like this guy Paul for some reason. ;-0

    1. He laughed at his friend when he got punched, and he laughed at the martini guy and nearly got beat up. I'm not sure about that track record, but all in all he's not such a bad guy.

  3. Holy cow how cool! I didn't expect the end! I think the mention of a pomegranate martini got me there. That sounds AMAZING!!!

    1. Thanks Katherine! I've never had a pomegranate martini but I think it would be good. Not what you would expect a swarmy guy to order, though. As it turned it is was for a woman. Those guys are always getting into something.

  4. He drank the invisible juice, yep, that's it.

    1. Tami, you've got to be careful what you drink in places like that.

  5. What a fun story about Eli:~) I love when you write fiction. You need to do it more often.

    My response to your question: I think Eli is dreaming and all he has to do is wake up!

    I can't believe your found that picture. That's great!!!

    1. Yeah, it's easier to do the fiction during a challenge. I look at the prompts and think about my selection of characters. There is another one coming up Friday if I can get it worked out in time.

      I googled "come as you are saloon" and got nothing so I looked for a picture I could modify. It's far from perfect, but I was pleased with it.


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